How to right a Movie ScriptCorrecting a movie script
You know that dialog you' re fighting with? Wrinkle it into a piece of cardboard and put it in the dustbin across the room. Can' t just drop the pencil bullet in a line. They must take into consideration all other factors that affect the sphere as it passes through the room: the attraction of the force of gravitation, the frictional force of the wind, the wind from the roof-fans.
One throws the football strongly to the right, the roof ventilator turns it in a light curve to the right, the gravitational force draws the football downwards, the frictional force from the atmosphere decelerates the forward movement of the football and the football falls into the trash-casket.
At every second of the dance several powers act on him. It is the total of all these powers that determine the way of the game. But he knows that there is not only one power at work, but many. He' ll judge all these powers when he fires the gun. Writers make a similar evaluation when they write dialogues.
For each line we consider all the powers that act on a given one. Dominating power is the target. Each script you will ever see speaks of the importance of giving your characters a purpose. Various lexicons will name it by different name ( "the aim, the desire, the overpowering need, the actions, the agenda, aso..."), but the underlying concept is all-purpose.
All characters must follow something - something special. An ungate is like a sheet of cardboard that blows in the breeze at random. If we give our characters a target, we start them in a certain way. Our characters are on a clear way like the paperball on its way to the barb.
But this is not the only power that affects the player, it is just the most dominating. Just like the blast of fans bending the way of the bullet, other powers distort a character's behaviour. There is no sub-text in their dialog between a person with one and only one power on them.
He has a clear target. Since no other power acts on him without being aware of the need to deal with another question, he can simply express his will. Suppose other powers had an effect on Sam. Attempt rewrite the line to mirror the following combination of powers.
What happens when a force is combined to distort the font of the dialog line? You fill your script with empty breaks and hopefully these breaks will make sense. Real sub-text is created by interweaving several dramatically powers into the words you have, not by simply editing the words you don't need.
Good dialog line shows the total of all powers that act on a given person at a given time. If two or more powers come together on a common line of dialog, this line of dialog must flex to mirror it. Is he going to describe the bending through the ventilator breezes?
Is he going to describe the frictional forces of the bubble of water on the pen? Let each member of the group choose a different dialog line from this symbol. So what's going on in the script right now? Explain any power (both outside and inside) that affects the characters at that time.
What are the most powerful of these powers? What did the line of dialog represent the equilibrium of these powers? Aren't there powers that aren't mirrored in the line? Did the writer miss an occasion in the context of the dialog to communicate the whole spectrum of the powers influencing the characters?
Each of them has compared and contrasted the powers that affect the characters at different stages of the script. What effect do the changes in power have on the story? Begin with the following two dialog lines: I' m going to the shop. Get some breastmilk while you're here.
Write the line from letter A three more than once. Whenever you do, apply an extra power to character A. Write the line from letter D three notations. Whenever you do, apply an extra power to character C. Use the last line of characters A and P rewritten.
You can use these as the first two rows of a 1-2-page dialog between the two signs. Attempt to keep the start force constant throughout the dialog. Speak out every dialog. Let the group try to match the powers that affect each one. So how did different starter power configurations result in different personality, different relationship, and different scene?
What was the total of all the powers exerted on the figure(s) at that time? Are you discussing for each dialog whether the powers remained constant throughout the entire sequence or not? Once the writer has altered the power mix during the dialog, let the writer debate why this is happening.
Then why wasn't he able to keep the consistence of the powers? Brainstorming a series of things one personality wants to have from another one. Start the characterization of each power with the sentence "From another individual wants my character....". Another guy, my personality wants the keys to the vehicle.
My personality wants to be respected by another one. My personality wants another inmate. Another personality wants my personality worship. Another willingness to leave my personality alone. Put each power on a single file tab. It is the mixture of powers that affect A. Select one to be the dominating power.
And the others will be lesser powers. It is the mixture of powers that affect character B. Select one to be the dominating one. And the others will be lesser powers. Create a 2-4-page sequence between character A and character B. Look for ways in which the powers can come into conflict, even within the same line.
Search for ways to use the contradictory powers to generate subtexts. When you get better in the practice, try to draw more hands from the cap to give each player extra powers.